1. Was it easy to read and understand?
2. Should I add more geners?
3. Did it flow from one piece to the next?
4. Should I add or take anything away?
5. What things should I consider revising?
6. Any open suggestions?

1. Who are the characters in your story? Chris Baillie, Emily Penn, Holly Ernst, Me
2. What connection do you feel to your place? It is a place that has changed over the past months and has played a huge part in my life.
3. When does the story take place? Present thoughts / Past Memories
4. Where does the story take place? In my mind
5. Why does the story take place? This story takes place becuase these thoughts and memories have been consuming my mind for the past few months. My friendship with Chris was something that I cherished and felt like expressing my emotions and memories of the events that have taken place.
6. How are you delivering/presenting the story? Narratives, Poems, Pictures, Music
 
    After our converstations with the group about our story  I realized I needed to change the way I was going about my writings. Instead of having memories, I can write about feelings and emotions about how I feel about my place. It was helpful hearing the imput of others becuase I was getting kind of lost with how to go about construsting and putting together the pieces I was writing.

Memory
                I decided to go for a refreshing walk down the beach to clear my head of any last minute jitters I may have. I knew he was the right guy, but everyone has the right to be a bit nervous before they say the words “I do”. As my feet dug into the sand I reminisced about my childhood and how I used to force my sister to play wedding dress up and I always had to be the bride and she was the groom. I chucked as the after wash of a wave ran through my toes picturing my sister and I walking down our hallway pretending it was the isle, realizing how much my life has changed. Making my way down the beach many memories ran through my mind, I sat down in the sand and gazed out at the endless ocean. I couldn’t help but recall the feeling of the first time I feel in love. Twelve years I’ve sat on the memory of the perfect love we shared and how I thought it would me him and I walking down the aisle those many years ago. How perfect and carefree our love was with one another and how blind we were to what the world would do to us. I would never regret anything in my life because everything does happen for a reason, but as I sit in the sand I can’t help but wonder what if I hadn’t stayed? What if I went away with him? Would it still be him and I? I’ll never forget how he changed me and it for him I thank for opening my eyes up to the possibilities of love. I get up and dust the sand off my shorts I grin excited to see what this new chapter in life is going to bring me.

 
Snow Day
                Waking up in the morning after a night of watching the beautiful snow fall out their window Jess and Blake woke up surrounded by a winter wonderland. As they turned on the radio they heard the alert that New Jersey was in a state of emergency. Blake needing to get to work somehow the next day threw on his snow gear and set outside to clear the long driveway of what seemed to be over a million inches of snow. Jess feeling guilty went outside to help her boyfriend shovel out the cars. After hours of clearing their driveway, the old man who lived across the street from them had yet to go outside and start his driveway. Being the good people they were Jess and Blake headed over to help out the old man, by the time they were shoveling the last bit of snow from his driveway the sun was completely down.  Each of them could barely feel their arms from how many times they had to life the heavy snow from the ground, and their faces were so read and chapped from being outside for so long. They ventured back to their house where they stripped off the many layers of clothes and tossed them into the washer. Blake went over and started up their fire place, while Jess boiled some water for the hot coco. Smelling the aroma of the delicious hot milk chocolate Black sat in front of the fire anxiously awaiting Jess. They both plopped down feeling the warmth of the fire and hot coco run through their bodies. Jess placed her head on Blake’s lap slowly closing her eyes while she whispered to him, “I cannot wait for summer”. Blake agreeingly chuckled as they both fell asleep in each other’s arms.